Women in a Windowed Box

Last evening I did two things worth noting here. Earlier, before the sun had set, I took my daughter to gymnastics. Much later when it was dark and cold but not nearly as windy I sat on the front porch tapping out yesterday’s 1000 Day entry on my phone.

Knowing I’d already missed my normal morning writing window, I carried along my writing notebook thinking I might find some inspiration in the parent-stuffed sitting room. I did, but I denied it. My notebook sat open in my lap for several minutes; the pen dangled above the page like the feet of the recently hanged hover over snow. I wasn’t shamed into tucking the pad away under my metal folding chair and reading my book instead. I was daunted and scared.

My plan had been to do some character sketches of the folks in the room. I rarely find myself in public spaces crowded with people and able to write at the same time. I should have drooling for this chance, but it caught me off guard how real and diverse the women there were.

Mary Ann sat to my right. The white running shoes she wore were trimmed with pink. They had been bought specifically to go on walks in the evening, but Mary Ann’s rubenesque build told the truer story: she wasn’t unhappy with how she looked. Sure she needed to be healthier, but being a wife and a mother held primary sway over her schedule and at the end of the day there just wasn’t time for her own things. No matter how much she swiped at her phone she wasn’t truly torn away from trying to locate her kids int he crowded gym.

Nancy Cutter buried herself in the corner past Mary Ann. Her black hair reflected the blue-tinged flourescence of our viewing box which contrasted her black knit sweater which absorbed that same light. Her skinny jeans ended in a pair of cowboy boots—not her for-the-farm pair, but the house-and-church ones. But she was in town with her daughter Casey, so she pushed her sunglasses back over her head like a headband. Her husband, Ben, joined her later. He wore an improbable pair of boots that had laces, a zipper, and a buckle around the back yet managed to seem genuinely Western. His hair was cut like he golfed and hit Nancy in his spare time—only twice and he promised never to again.

Ben crowded the blonde hole behind him. Whoever she was had turned up late, immediately spun the walled chair around, and put on her best 1000-yard stare to drill past the tweens on the uneven parallel bars and to her son on the vault for 45 minutes.

Which brings us to the lesbians. I don’t know how lesbians are in your town, maybe they’re always French-kissing and holding hands walking down the lane like it’s all OK, but here in Oklahoma ours are polite. They marry men who don’t know, but would be irreligeously turned on if they did. In public they act like real close friends, but when two women sit face-to-face and side-by-side in two folding chairs for an hour, when their hands brush each other’s thighs over and over, when their hair is pixie-cut and bed-headed like that woman from Top Gun, a fella just knows. And whats up with sandle boots with cuffs?

I’m running out of time so I’ll summarize the last two women: unapologetically loud and psychologically youthful grandma and her I-played-softball-in-college daughter. Both with long hair in a generally short-haired room.

Oh, and I plotted Charming a little later that night.

605 words on day 730

Cole: A Singularity Story

I noticed the sensation of my head deep in a barrel with one hand alternating between scraping around and holding me up the first time I read this book. I’m realizing now why I don’t like some of these plots. I understand them as plots, but the author inconsistantly outlines each archetype. Rather than methodically analyze each plot and present a symbolic outline he book-reports a movie matching his idea of that plot. When he draws me into specific characters by name and situation the effort obscures the blueprint not elucidates it.

Sigh.

Theme – Discovery. Personal discovery not adventuring for treasure and glory.

Setup – Cole is everything you’d think a college student would be. Growing up, unsure about the future, trying to find a girlfriend, but wary of how to do any of those things.

Hook – After having a great night at a dorm sponsored end of semester bash, Cole discovers his well-meaning buddies bribed his date to go out with him.

Plot Point 1 – Cole determines to transfer schools so that he can clear the slate and find a girl without the risk of a setup, but he can’t leave till the end of the second semester without forfeiting most of his fees.

Pinch 1 – As the Spring Semester Bash approaches, Cole’s friends badger him about maybe being gay.

Mid-point Twist – Back home for Summer Break Cole meets a nice girl, Anna, working at the coffee shop he frequents. They hit it off.

Pinch 2 – Anna mentions to Cole that his mother encouraged her to befriend Cole because Mom worried he might be gay. Clearly he can’t find a girl on his own or worse.

Lull

Plot Point 2 – Cole accepts that he’s either gay and too scared to confront that situation or that he’s completely ineffectual at meeting girls and never will without help.

Conclusion – At a 10 year Homecoming Cole and friends gather for a BBQ at Cole’s home. Their married-with-kids lives contrast with his own single-guy life, but he’s comfortable with his choices.

I forced some of this into the plan I had before I wrote the Hook. Usually I save the hook for after or partly through rather than start with it populated. In this instance I populated it and immediately had a nearly different story to head down.

If I returned to this I’d examine the hook and either better craft it for leading into a more appropriate story or I’d redo the hook itself. Make these two parts match up better than they do.

431 words on day 675

Red Roy

I’m not a fan of this one either as I predicted I wouldn’t be yesterday, but I do think I’ve come up with a good idea of how to work it as best I can.

Theme – Maturation

Setup – Darcy, a girl from Lawrence, Kansas, attends the University of Missouri as a nursing student. She is in a serious relationship with a young man from Virginia (he’s doesn’t appreciate her major). Neither can stay in Columbia for the summer, but neither can go to the other’s hometown (for some super valid sounding reason).

Hook – Darcy’s tearful good-bye to her college boyfriend who is returning the Virginia for the summer following Finals.

Plot Point 1 – Darcy decides she can’t spend the summer after her Sophomore year in college moping around her parents home; she joins a scout friend of hers at a summer camp in New Mexico as a camp counselor.

Pinch 1 – In a backcountry rockclimbing camp officially named Arroyo Rojo but affectionatly called ‘Red Roy’, a camper hanging a bear bag for the night slips on a rock and breaks his arm. Everyone turns to Darcy; she turns out to be so nervous as to almost worse than useless. Darcy quits her position at Red Roy, but the camp director convinces her to at least stay on at base camp in a role that won’t put her at risk of working with injuries.

Mid-point Twist – bushwhacking back to base camp for days-off, Darcy comes upon an advisor stumbling in the woods; he collapses and is unconcious before she can speak to him. She starts CPR.

Pinch 2 – Doctors arrive on scene hours later and pronounce the advisor dead.

Lull – Darcy talks with with her Red Roy friends around a campfire about the incident..

Plot Point 2 – bah!

Conclusion – I’m skipping to this part because I can’t stop the different scenes needed for all this from flooding in. I’m not sure how to organize them best to make this all work out or exactly how far back to Mizzou and Darcy’s boyfriend I need to go. If it’s maturation then is seems like I ought to get her back to school for the contrast, but i can’t figure out wear to put all the action just yet.

376 words on day 671