Day 37: An Unlikely Pilgrim’s Second Pass

    “You really are a pilgrim?”  The extraordinarily large man emphasized the noun and not the verb in his astonished query.

“You don’t think I am old enough?”  Tritti asked.

“No, no, no, darling.  You arnt, but thass not why.”  The man’s puffy hands rapped the reins and the two kabs shambled up.

Tritti watched him goad the team of lizards to a proper speed.  His plain attire showed much use.  From the no-longer black top hat clinging improbably to his scalp in the more than occasionally brisk desert wind to the (something near the foot) the round man was dulled and diminished.  His brown on top white on bottom fat arms proclaimed him a typical veteran of the road.  As did his well-used but well-kept rig.  Everything about this man declared him to be uninteresting.  Why would a man go to so much trouble to seem uninteresting when he so clearly was?

“I’m a girl.”  Tritti confessed.  She’d always known that no matter how different the world might be outside her village the world would still be the same in regards to her gender.  The man laughed.  It was only an amused chuckle but his whole body participated.  “Yes, I thought so too.  Let me tell you something about where you are going.”

“The original Tacon were gypsies.  Still are actually, but yull find none of them in Shanty.”  He began again, “The original Tacon were gypsies.  Now gypsies to you and me are bands of folk traveling form place to place fixing things.  They go here and here and here and here.  Then back to the first here.  Or the second.  It makes no difference where those kind of gypsies go.  They just want to be going.  You understand what Im sayn?”

“They call me Johnka.  You can too.”

Day 36: An Unlikely Pilgrim

    “You really are a pilgrim?”  The extraordinarily large man emphasized the noun and not the verb in his astonished query.

“You don’t think I am old enough?”  Tritti asked.

“No, no, no, darling.  You aren’t, but that’s not why.”  The man’s puffy hands rapped the reins and the two kabs shambled up.  Everything about this round man declared him to be uninteresting.  His sun faded maroon vest said he’d been on this road for years.  As did his brown on top white on bottom fat arms.  His rig blah blah blah (stuff about how plain he is).  Why would a man go to so much trouble to seem uninteresting when he so clearly was?

“I’m a girl.”  Tritti said it like it was a confession.  She’d always known that no matter how different the world was outside her village it would still be the same in regards to her gender.

The man laughed.  It was only an amused chuckle but his whole body participated.  “Yes, I thought so too.  Let me tell you something about where you are going.”

“They call me Johnka.  You can too.”

wondered why he hadn’t thought she was making a pilgrimage.  

wondered why a pilgrim would be so unusual, especially here, along the road to ah’Taconschientee.

Day 35: Some Epiphanies

It’s working.  It’s really working!

Writing every day has helped me to recognize and begin to conquer three things: not writing every day, flat passive voice, and quality over volume.

The first and most obvious of these three is that I am writing every day.  The proof is right here, but I am also writing more elsewhere.  And that is good too.  Though the tie I write on my work blog drains time I could devote to this specific venue.

What I am calling flat passive voice or sneaky passive is getting pruned.  Ha Ha.  No doubt it has a real name, but that’s what I’ll call it for now.  I’d go ahead and define and demonstrate if I could just think of a concrete example.  Since I can’t I’ll just roll on to the next one and leave you with the fact that I think I am overcoming this one.

Yesterday I glimpsed the leading edge of my hang up on quality over progress.  I reffered to it as volume above, but that is not correct.  What I mean to convey is that I have begun to push my writing forward even when I know it’s sucking a bit as it trails behind my keystrokes.  I still slide back for the occasional typo correction or word replacement, but I don’t wholesale rework a line.  I need that.

Good day.