I’m going to back peddle on my attempted plan today. I was going to extend yesterday’s scene into the argument and outcome. Instead I’ll think it through a bit more. As much as you may think I write too much about what I’m planning on doing, I don’t feel the same. Much of what I do here when I’m writing about my writing is more of a brainstorm exercise. Considering the possibilities of what might happen or what could be the reason. What I’m doing now is to take a scene I know I need and writing out the goals of that scene.
I don’t know how to do that, so if what comes next looks no different from what came before what can I say?
This scene is early in the story. Lots of things need to happen so there is less room for interstitial content. Lean.
This is part one of a three part micro-plot for our victim. The entirety of which occurs in part one of the overall story. Unless I can find a twist for later.
This introduces the victim in a way that makes us sympathetic to how his death adversely effects Charming. Not the victim—we want him dead. But the animosity between the two can’t be so extreme that any sensible reader or character would think Charming had a hand in his death. That shouldn’t be a question.
At some point I’d like Charming to angrily but innocently say something to the effect of “I’d like to kill that guy.” The sort of thing anyone would say in anger.
Keeping in mind that her character is still orphan-like at this stage she needs to lose the argument. Not by explicitly giving Jun-kata money for the shirts, but arranging to meet him later.
Jun-kata’s hidden goal throughout is that he had entered into business with Charming because of all the girls that throw themselves at him on The Song, she never did. He has a crush on her. He’s angry because he screwed up the t-shirt thing, but he’s not willing to admit to her that he did—or that he doesn’t have the money to fix it. Pride is his problem. Love is his motivator.
By asking her for more money for the shirts he feels like he’s inviting her to a business partnership of sorts. By resisting, she’s doubting his competency. Of course that pisses him off.
Karl’s role in this is to act as representative of The Song at large. Which finds the entire public argument quite distasteful.
The Pit however will act as barometer for the two arguing. As their anger increases the energy of The Pit will increase.
Charming needs to leave this scene flustered and angry at herself for caving. She can never she that Jun-kata has a crush on her. Her flustered state leads to her first bout of dermatographia.
Charming’s cause worsens because this public outburst not only runs contrary to her desire for acceptance, but also because it contributes to the prosecution’s case against her in the murder trial. All previous harmony Charming enjoyed with her fellow Bennies fractures. Evidence of that is in Karl’s behavior.
544 words on day 517
