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Evening Revelry

Today is about plotting this Benhá story.

The following aren’t necessarily full chapters or scenes. You should assume a mixture of scenes, chapters, and sub-chapter events.

  • Escape from The Song
  • Abandonment on the shores of the Benhá river
  • Eavesdropping on Brother Gane and someone more (less?) important than he. Misunderstands that Gane had some hand in the ‘firing of The Song’ and that maybe it was all an illusion.
  • Introduction of The Song
  • MC selling in her booth
  • MC meeting mysterious old man(Gane)
  • Discovering the body
  • Meeting the live victim?
  • Surprise revealing of the condition of the victim
  • Evening revelry in the entertainment quarter of The Song
  • Mayor trying to sway Gane against MC
  • MC traveling alone to monastery
  • Gane casting a shielding spell over MC
  • The shield spell wearing off en route to the monastery
  • Running away from the monastery
  • Returning to the burnt out ruins of The Song
  • Meeting other ‘magician/monks’ at the monastery
  • Skin writing training
  • Some illuminating scene why SW is valuable (help)
  • Discovering the truth about mom and dad. They were hiding out in The Song.
  • PP1: Murder of a new friend at the monastery; (can’t exactly do murder a third time can I?)
  • PP2: Remote blastings finally hit MC directly when she gets to the gutted The Song; she’s nearly killed
  • MC trying to use SW as a weapon; linked to PP1?

233 words on day 505

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What is the Solex Thing

I guess I’m getting better writing in the night out of sudden necessity. School started up. Other unusual time taking activities have risen up along side. I need to be ready for next week too when I’m single parenty.

Yesterday’s writing was nearly crap but it gave me a good lead to start the rescue from fire scene. I need to spend a little time considering what must have happened to Brother Gane in the Shanty story so that I can have some realistic chance of connecting this version of him to that version. Since one of the key elements from his maquette is that he’s a faker having him not be faking now seems like a natural progression. Or maybe he fakes in a thin way.

I think maybe the solex company may have been replaced by something more spiritual. Maybe I need to better decide what the solex thing even is.

Tomorrow is my real test. I should plan for some scene writing

170 words on day 504

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A Rookery of Tin Pans

Two evenings in a row I find myself writing.

Brother Gane rests his elbow on the arm of the chair. He props his head on his thumb and middle finger and rubs his forhead with the spare index. The sun is down. The sea is black.

Behind him, through corrugated metal walls, the nighttime cacaphony of The Song swells with the tide. He resists the urge to check the time. Curfew will fall when it falls. Until then The Song will rattle and cheer and squawk like a rookery of tin pans. Many villagers already sleep. Only the bars and dance cans remain open for business. He stands abruptly and leaves his room.

Beetles clatter at a bare bulb lighting the gang running in front of his door. The early arrivers and first to perish crunch under foot as Gane strides to the railing and heads upstream away from distraction. A quick hres might muffle the noise, but it would also tug at his attention and he can’t have that tonight. Tonight he must find a way to extricate MC and bring her to [wherever] before this trial concludes. For that he needs concentration and time to work out the moves.

He checks the time after all: five more minutes.

211 words on day 503